That Bunny Is Not For Science

Would you rather be involved in a test where you had to inhale toxic fumes or be injected with a cancer inducing substance? A test where you were restrained while chemicals were placed into your eyes or in a patch of shaved skin? Fortunately, people will never have to choose between these things. In fact, we are lucky to have the ability to choose at all. But unlike us, animals do not have this ability.

Just like us, animals are living, thinking, and feeling creatures. They sit in pain as they wait for the next excruciatingly painful test to be performed on them. According to People for the Ethical Treatment of Animals (PETA), over 100 million animals die in the U.S. because of cruel cosmetic, drug, chemical, or food tests by different companies. Some that test their products on animals are: L'Oréal, Head and Shoulders, Estée Lauder, and Pantene. Furthermore, PETA states that some of these animals are domesticated e.g. dogs, cats, guinea pigs. Would you want your pet to be subjected to something like this?

I tried to use Zinsser's advice on not using unnecessary adjectives and adverbs for verbs that have the same meaning. I did this because if I had used them, then my writing would be cluttered. Mistakes like that would probably distract the reader from the point I'm trying to make. I also tried not to use "little qualifiers" like "pretty much" or "kind of" because they would decrease my persuasiveness.

Comments

  1. UnknownOctober 2, 2016 at 3:36 PM

    Your introduction really dragged me in and made me feel empathy. I love that you used real life examples and brands and also statistical data from PETA. :)

    ReplyDelete
    Replies
    1. UnknownOctober 3, 2016 at 9:18 AM

      Your use of pathos was also really effective.

      Delete
  2. UnknownOctober 3, 2016 at 7:36 AM

    The title of your post made me laugh. You opened with rhetorical questioning that was both funny and engaging. In addition, you used a credible source to build your argument against unethical treatment of animals.

    ReplyDelete

Post a Comment

Popular posts from this blog

I Didn't Drown This Time

The second day of our vacation in Barbados, I told my mother that I didn't want to leave an air conditioned house to go to the non-air conditioned outdoors. So of course,  we had to take a ride to the beach. Sweat was running down my back like a waterfall (gross, I know) as I stepped out of the car and into the sun. It was incredibly bright and strong, and reminded me of that Madonna song that goes:"The sun would set so high, ring through my ears and sting my eyes..." I think if I had taken the neon green sunglasses I was wearing off, I'd probably be blinded its rays. The moment my foot hit the ground, I could feel it sinking into the burning hot sand. The sand felt like fire under my feet and the fact that I had on an old, frayed, and worn-out pair of Keds didn't help. The soles were so thin that I might as well have been walking barefoot. Despite the numerous amount of trees in the sand, there wasn't any shade. The sound of birds chirping and waves surrounde...
Read more

Is David Sedaris Fluent in French Now?

Analysis In Me Talk Pretty One Day, David Sedaris, an acclaimed writer and comic, discusses how learning a new language in a new country can be difficult and frightening. Sedaris explains his struggle to learn French when he moved to Paris, with the use of hyperbole and imagery. He uses the former throughout the text to describe his trouble learning the language. At one point in the text, Sedaris says "Learning French is a lot like joining a gang in that it involves a long and intensive period of hazing. And it wasn't just my teacher, the entire population seemed to be in on it (22)." This is a very obvious hyperbole. He exaggerates how hard it is to learn French by likening it to something as violent as being hazed by a gang. He also says "Her reaction [to his mispronunciation and assignment of the wrong gender to some French words] led me to believe that these mistakes were capital crimes in the country." Evidently, Sedaris is just magnifying his feelings...
Read more